Amity
We The People
This is a very well-written free write. There are a few spelling errors in your first paragraph that may trip up the reader. Also, a few of your sentences seem very long and run-on (paragraph 2, the last sentence). Other than these few editorial issues, you raise some interesting questions about our government. This could be developed so that you pinpoint your own political views more specifically but overall, this was an interesting piece that was easy to follow.
Buy Low and Sell High
I enjoyed reading this post because it flowed nicely and incorporated the text accurately. I would only suggest revising some of your organization – all three paragraphs seems to be talking about the same things just in a different way. This could be transformed in to a bigger writing piece by elaborating on both the specific social, economic and technological changes and then what theories and discoveries were found to help the field of finance.
Hilary
View of the Continuum
You did a great job of expressing your views of the political continuum without being too persuasive either way. This post was easy to follow and although you did not use any support from our text, your ideas were still clearly expressed. If you wanted to expand on this post you could research a political party that holds most of your same views and write about it.
For Those Who Work in Finance…
You decided to take a different approach on this topic than most of the rest of us. Instead of boring us with the history of the finance field (which we all read anyway), you took a different stance and told us some of the qualifications it takes to be in the finance field and why people chose this as a profession. I enjoyed reading this post because it was different, good job.
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